Best Scene TV PILOT Reading of FAMILY OF SPIES, by Susan Lambert Hatem

Best Scene from FAMILY OF SPIES Screenplay
Written by Susan Lambert Hatem

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Val Cole
BEN – Matthew Lawrence
SPENCER – Cory Bertrand
AMY – Cassandra Guthrie
GUARD – Peter-Mark Raphael
SEAN – Vince Jerad

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Family, Crime, Drama

Mom and former-police-officer-turned-lawyer Julia Molina is trying to have it all, but all she’s feeling is stuck in the middle of a boring job and chaotic home life. When an old friend with a mysterious past shows up to ask for her help, Julia suddenly finds herself drawn into a web of lies, spies and intrigue.


Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

The official synopsis is this:

Mom and former-police-officer-turned-lawyer Celeste Harper is stuck in the middle of a boring job and chaotic home life. When an old friend with a mysterious past shows up to ask for her help, Celeste suddenly finds herself drawn into a web of lies, spies and intrigue. Soon, her husband, Ben, who has a hidden past of his own, and her precocious kids, Sean and Darby are called into action as well. In the process of saving the world, they may also wind up saving their family.

But for me, this story is really about:

The desire to make a difference with your work and how that may clash with the responsibilities of raising a family. It’s been my challenge as a writer, a producer and mom. This story is a fun and intriguing metaphor for every parent’s challenge in the world: Can you raise a family and save the world*?

*aka – Get your very important work done before it’s time to pick up your kids from school.

What genres does your screenplay under?

Family, Action-Thriller

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

I haven’t seen anything quite like my version. There is of course Spy Kids and Mr and Mrs. Smith and The Incredibles, all of which were inspirations, as was the 80s TV show, Scarecrow and Mrs. King and the TV show Chuck (basically the reverse Scarecrow and Mrs. King). I wanted to create a live-action action thriller that I can watch with my kids and I would enjoy as much as them. I think we’re clamoring as audiences for something that is exciting, but not too dark. Adventurous, but aspirational and that has heart. I know I am.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Fun. Intriguing.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

I was always interested in the arts, music, theatre. But it was seeing the original Star Wars at a young age that took my creative breath away. I just had never seen anything like it. I saw it 32 times in a theatre the first year it came out (and it stayed in theaters for a year!).

As an adult, it’s probably a three-way tie between Jaws, Die Hard and Who’s Afraid of Virginia Woolf, mostly because if they show up on TV/in my que, I just can’t stop watching them. I produced the website for Finding Nemo, so I saw that a lot when I was at Disney and then on top of that, my son was obsessed with it as a 4-yr old. I may have seen that movie 40 times!

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

I had the shape of the idea almost 3 years ago. Because of other projects, it took a two years before I could even begin to write it. Then it took about 5 months to write the first draft. Various revisions and feedback took about six months, getting me to the version I submitted to Festival for Family. I have since revised it more based on feedback from Festival for Family and friends. And that I now think it’s better as a TV pilot.

How many stories have you written?

A lot. I have been writing most of my life: short stories, screenplays, plays. I went to USC Film School and have been an independent filmmaker, theatre maker and producer. I like wearing many hats. I like to make most of my stuff independently. Since I also direct, produce, consult in digital marketing and have a family, I go in spurts with my writing. I was doing a lot of producing and directing for a number of years, so I didn’t write screenplays for about five years. Then this last two years, I’ve been writing a plethora of material. I’ve never written like this before. It’s like planes circling an airport, trying to come in for a landing. Much of my stuff, I produce independently. But some ideas, like Family of Spies, I feel have more commercial potential and I’m interested in getting them out to a wider audience.

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

The first spark came one Christmas Eve with my husband, putting a trampoline together in our backyard. In the dark. Right outside our kids’ window. I loved the idea of the secret, quiet conversations/arguments parents have together in the dark of the night when they’re trying to make the world happen for their kids.

I also love action thrillers and spy movies and television. As my youngest kid moved away from watching animated and “children’s” films, there was a lack of what I felt was appropriate movies and television to watch together. Those transition films. I wanted that. So I wrote it. I was fascinated by the challenge I personally feel trying to balance work with family. It’s a pull that I feel (mostly) women have, but in this work-constantly, fear-driven culture, I think everyone feels that pull to come together and connect with each other in a scary world.

I’m interested how women and men, parents and families, can try to affect real change. This story is a metaphor for acting on that instinct to step up: to volunteer, become an activist, get outside your comfort zone and do something real to help people. To change the world. And I want us to bring our kids along. Let them see us be leaders and heroes and they will be leaders and heroes.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Time. And structure. It started as a screenplay and then I realized pretty much around the draft I submitted to Festival for Family, I really want it to be a TV show. I think the world and the characters became bigger to me. I want them to go on and on. So the structure changed a lot. Also, world events and changing times made me try to be very careful about what I was saying about violence and about power structures. That is an ongoing challenge.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

I love my family and friends. I am passionate about diversity, science, technology, music, justice and protecting the environment. I like to walk, hike and ride my bike. I love good stories and good, independent entertainment. In addition to writing, I produce (and write and sometimes direct) plays, musicals, web shows, music albums. I am passionate about responsible digital marketing for entertainment and worked with Disney (for years) and Dreamworks (as a consultant).

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

Keep writing. And make stuff. Work together. Find your people and make stuff with them. Technology gives us exciting tools we need to put stories we love out into the world. Don’t rely on gatekeepers.

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Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson

October 2016 Family Films/Screenplays/Stories

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Watch the best of Family from October 2016:

ACTORFEATURE Screenplay: CHARLOTTE SOMETIMES
October 2016 Reading
Written by Cate Carson

ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay – PARADISE AT MAIN AND ELM
October 2016 Reading
Written by Barry Brennessel

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

Winning FAMILY Feature Screenplay – CHARLOTTE SOMETIMES by Cate Carson

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CHARLOTTE SOMETIMES
Written by Cate Carson

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Family, Drama, Fantasy

After losing her mother, a vexed 9 y.o. girl discovers a dream machine hidden in her deaf father’s workshop, but an unexpected friendship with a quirky boy becomes the real cure to her loneliness.

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Michelle Alexander
CHARLOTTE – Katelyn Varadi
OLIVER – Gabriel Darku
MS. GRAY – Sandy Kellerman
OLDER CHARLOTTE – Julie C. Sheppard
OLDER OLIVER – Rikki Wright

Get to know the winning writer:

What is your screenplay about?

After losing her mother, a vexed 8 y.o. girl discovers a dream machine hidden in her deaf father’s workshop, but an unexpected friendship with a quirky boy becomes the real cure to her loneliness.

What genres does your screenplay under?

Family/Holiday/Dramedy

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Everyone experiences grief and everyone needs love to heal. This film is one that can speak to all ages and will bring audiences on an adventure while making them laugh and cry, but most importantly – feel.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Quirky and endearing

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Liar Liar, Forrest Gump and either the Die Hard series or Lethal Weapon series. This is a very tough question.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

Two years

How many stories have you written?

Probably around 10

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

I heard of someone named Charlotte Sometimes, fell in love with it and built a character and story around it.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Making sure the whimsical fantasy elements aligned well with the real world. Making sure everything had a purpose. I was grateful for the extensive feedback from this festival because it helped me more critically analyze and fix this portion of my screenplay.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

I am also a director, actor and producer. I own a company called Sensorium Pictures. Besides film I love creating other types of art, photography, the outdoors and am passionate about finding my place as a humanitarian. I have always wanted to help people and telling their stories is only one avenue for doing that.

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

Write and keep writing. Try to show your work to people who are better than you. There will always be someone with value to add. Submitting to a few festivals with script feedback can be a tremendous help – especially after you have exhausted your inner circle and want fresh eyes. Your friends and family count only if they know what they’re talking about.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Casting: Sean Ballantyne

Editing: John Johnson

Short Screenplay – CAPITAL STEPS by Jennifer Renner

Watch the September 2016 Winning FAMILY Short Screenplay.

CAPITAL STEPS
Written by Jennifer Renner

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Family, Drama, Comedy

Two fifth-grade boys try to learn how to play the game of politics.

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Sean Ballantyne
BEN – Brogan Caulfield
GRANDMOTHER – Viktoria Napoleonova
RUSELL – Martin Huss
GRANITINO – Michael Lake
BEN’S MOTHER – Erynn Brook
MRS. PENNYNACKLE – Michelle Alexander

Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

Two fifth-grade boys find themselves entrenched in the world of politics.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Family, comedy .

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

It is a comedic look at many of the foibles of modern politics that would hopefully lead to discussions about politics while providing a few laughs.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Farcical civics

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Robin Hood: Men in Tights

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

I wrote the first draft of this screenplay about seven years ago, then put it away. I found it earlier this year and started rewriting it.

How many stories have you written?

More than a handful, less than a ton.

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

For some reason, the ridiculous behavior of politicians has been on my mind lately…

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

It was, at times, difficult to keep the story simple and straightforward while still maintaining some level of believability (though this is a satire and meant to be seen as such).

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

9. Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Participating in interesting experiences that I can use in my writing.

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

Just keep writing and don’t let the man get you down.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Editor: John Johnson

Casting Director: Sean Ballatyne

Read the best of NEW FAMILY TV SHOW Loglines:

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SON OF A PREACHER MAN, by Brandon Edwards

FORBIDDEN SECRETS, by Salena O’Neal

THE AMBITIOUS LIFE OF APPLE, by Lucky Mabdar

DREAM KEEPERS, by Leodis Smith

KIDS WORLD, by Stacy Solomon

ALIBIS GHOSTS, by Linda Hullinger

THE HOMELESS DETECTIVE, by Larry Hankin

 

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August 2016 Family Films/Screenplays/Stories

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Watch the best of Family from August 2016:


festival poster101 CUPCAKES, 13min, Australia, Family/Drama
WATCH Audience FEEDBACK

ACTORNOVEL Prologue – THE ACE OF KINGS
August 2016 Reading
Written by Dan Levinson


festival posterLUCY, 16min, Greece, Family/Drama
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festival posterGHOSTBOY, 9min., UK, Animation/Comedy
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festival posterAWESOME BEETLE’S COLORS, 3min, Latvia, Animation/Musical
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INSIDE, 3min., Belguim, Animation/Comedy

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festival poster5476 Miles, 4min, UK, Animation/Music Video
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festival posterSPARROW DUET, 4min, USA, Animation/Experimental
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festival posterA SMALL VOICE, 2min, UK, Animation/Drama
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festival posterBOTTOMLESS, 2min, USA, Animation/Biography
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festival posterSEA OF INK, 3min, USA, Animation/Drama
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festival poster1916, 4min, UK, Animation/Drama
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festival posterTIME SMASH, 2min., USA, Animation/Sci-Fi
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JAILBREAK, 1min., USA, Animation/Crime

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

Watch Winning Family Short Screenplay: THE FACTS OF LIFE by Chris Beadnell

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THE FACTS OF LIFE
Written by Chris Beadnell
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SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Family, Comedy

A parent’s nightmare, the dreaded ‘birds and bees’ chat. This loving father steps up to the plate to answer the questions from his inquisitive daughter. He is nervous as he awkwardly navigates his way through an explanation. But, humorously, the circumstance changes at the end.

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Sean Kaufmann
TINA – Elizabeth Rose Morriss
TREVOR – Robert Notman

 

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Watch the best of Family from July 2016:

ACTORI LIKE YOU, 2min, Italy, Drama/Romance
Short Film from July 2016 Film Festival

ACTORSILENCE, 3min, Russia, Romance/Drama
Short Film from July 2016 Film Festival

ACTORSHORT STORY – DESPITE DEMENTIA
July 2016 Reading
Written by Janet Bennett Cox

ACTORFAN FICTION Screenplay – STAR TREK: DEEP SPACE NINE
July 2016 Reading
Written by Jennifer Renner

ACTORSHORT Screenplay – THE BLUE DRESS
July 2016 Reading
Written by Dave Riese

ACTORSHORT Screenplay – THE FACTS OF LIFE
July 2016 Reading
Written by Chris Beadnell

ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay – DUE SOUTH
July 2016 Reading
Written by Evan Schullery

ACTORSHORT STORY – LEFT ON LUNDY
July 2016 Reading
Written by James R. Cavell

ACTORSHORT STORY – TALKING YEOW
July 2016 Reading
Written by Lynne Adams Barze

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

Short Screenplay – THE BLUE DRESS by Dave Riese

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THE BLUE DRESS by Dave Riese

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Sean Kaufmann
REBECCA – Elizabeth Rose Morriss
EDITH – Mandy May Cheetham
MICHAEL – Devin Upham
WALLACE – Neil Bennett

Get to know the winning writer Dave Riese:

1. What is your screenplay about?

Rebecca, 12 years old, learns that her Uncle Wallace, a cattle baron from Texas, is coming to visit. Rebecca doesn’t like her uncle and her only hope is that he will bring her a birthstone ring like the one he bought for her cousin the year before. After dinner, Uncle Wallace gives Rebecca her gift: a blue dress once owned by his wife Vera who has remained in Texas. When Rebecca’s mother asks her to try on the dress, Rebecca, bitterly disappointed, runs to her room in tears.

Rebecca soon suspects that her father and Uncle Wallace have reached an agreement that she won’t like. When her suspicions become true, Rebecca finds a way to exact a fitting revenge in return for the adults’ betrayal.

2. Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

With the classic theme of a child against adults, this film can be enjoyed by preteens to eighty year olds. The central character of the child is not the usual heroine. The childish perspective of Rebecca contrasts with the reality facing the adults. The number of characters is limited to five; most of the action takes place in a house, its porch, and front yard. A street sidewalk is the only other location. The short story takes place just after WWII in Montreal, but this time frame can be pushed up 10-20 years, if necessary; the location can be moved to the US. A new car from the period is the main object that much reflect the period.

3. How would you describe this script in two words?

Outwitting adults.

4. What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

It’s hard to say. It’s a toss-up between Psycho, Citizen Kane, Wizard of Oz, and North by Northwest. All the while I’m watching, I’m telling myself, “You’ve seen this hundred times. You know every scene and most of the dialogue. Go do something else.” But I can’t tear myself away.

5. How long have you been working on this screenplay?

I’ve been working on this screenplay off and on for six months.

6. How many stories have you written?

I’ve written about 20 stories and a novel, published last year, called Echo from Mount Royal

7. What motivated you to write this screenplay?

I wanted to try my hand at writing a screenplay. My short story called The Blue Dress seemed to offer a good combination of dialogue and conflict. I was also intrigued by the young girl who struggles against the adults. Her perspective offered the opportunity to combine humor with sympathy. Her relationship with her mother vs her father undergoes a reversal that provides a satisfying conclusion.

8. What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Adapting a short story taught me how to externalize the interior thoughts of the characters. For example, the friend, Jackie, was created to help us understand, more clearly, the motivations of Rebecca. Several scenes of backstory in the prose work was dropped for time reasons and to make the plot line more streamlined. The criticism I received from the judge at the festival pertained to the length of time before the uncle arrives at Rebecca’s home. His arrival propels the plot into Act Two and must come sooner. Act One of the screenplay was shortened by 25% in the next revision.

9. Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

My wife and I enjoy travelling throughout the world. I enjoy gardening and spending time with our grandchildren. Reading is the center of my life.

10. What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I joined FilmFreeway and began searching for festivals that accepted short screenplays. I chose this festival because I got a down-to-earth vibe from the website. I expect that hearing the screenplay will help me hear what dialogue works and what doesn’t. Also the judge’s criticism was exactly what had to be changed.

11. Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

Join a critique group where you have the opportunity to workshop your script. Revise the script over and over to tighten the dialogue. Try to find place where a single word or sentence or action defines a character. Watch lots of films and study screenplays to see how professionals solve the problems we all face.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson

June 2016 2016 Family Films/Screenplays/Stories

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Watch the best of Family from June 2016:

ACTORShort Story Reading – MAMA’S PURFECT DAY
June 2016 Reading
Written by Richard Marra
ACTORBest Scene Screenplay – SEED OF THE WOMAN
June 2016 Reading
Written by Gary R. Billings
ACTORJACK IS PRETTY, 26min, USA, Fantasy/Family
Watch Audience FEEDBACK Video of the Short Film from June 2016 Film Festival
ACTORTV PILOT Screenplay – WILD MAGIC
June 2016 Reading
Written by Julie Nichols
ACTORShort Story Reading – DESTINY OF JOY
June 2016 Reading
Written by Mary Eastham
ACTORShort Story Reading – CULT FAN
June 2016 Reading
Written by Gina Lee Ronhovde

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson