After losing her mother, a vexed 9 y.o. girl discovers a dream machine hidden in her deaf father’s workshop, but an unexpected friendship with a quirky boy becomes the real cure to her loneliness.
After losing her mother, a vexed 8 y.o. girl discovers a dream machine hidden in her deaf father’s workshop, but an unexpected friendship with a quirky boy becomes the real cure to her loneliness.
What genres does your screenplay under?
Family/Holiday/Dramedy
Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?
Everyone experiences grief and everyone needs love to heal. This film is one that can speak to all ages and will bring audiences on an adventure while making them laugh and cry, but most importantly – feel.
How would you describe this script in two words?
Quirky and endearing
What movie have you seen the most times in your life?
Liar Liar, Forrest Gump and either the Die Hard series or Lethal Weapon series. This is a very tough question.
How long have you been working on this screenplay?
Two years
How many stories have you written?
Probably around 10
What motivated you to write this screenplay?
I heard of someone named Charlotte Sometimes, fell in love with it and built a character and story around it.
What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?
Making sure the whimsical fantasy elements aligned well with the real world. Making sure everything had a purpose. I was grateful for the extensive feedback from this festival because it helped me more critically analyze and fix this portion of my screenplay.
Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?
I am also a director, actor and producer. I own a company called Sensorium Pictures. Besides film I love creating other types of art, photography, the outdoors and am passionate about finding my place as a humanitarian. I have always wanted to help people and telling their stories is only one avenue for doing that.
Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?
Write and keep writing. Try to show your work to people who are better than you. There will always be someone with value to add. Submitting to a few festivals with script feedback can be a tremendous help – especially after you have exhausted your inner circle and want fresh eyes. Your friends and family count only if they know what they’re talking about.
Two fifth-grade boys find themselves entrenched in the world of politics.
What genres does your screenplay fall under?
Family, comedy .
Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?
It is a comedic look at many of the foibles of modern politics that would hopefully lead to discussions about politics while providing a few laughs.
How would you describe this script in two words?
Farcical civics
What movie have you seen the most times in your life?
Robin Hood: Men in Tights
How long have you been working on this screenplay?
I wrote the first draft of this screenplay about seven years ago, then put it away. I found it earlier this year and started rewriting it.
How many stories have you written?
More than a handful, less than a ton.
What motivated you to write this screenplay?
For some reason, the ridiculous behavior of politicians has been on my mind lately…
What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?
It was, at times, difficult to keep the story simple and straightforward while still maintaining some level of believability (though this is a satire and meant to be seen as such).
Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?
9. Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?
Participating in interesting experiences that I can use in my writing.
Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?
Just keep writing and don’t let the man get you down.
A parent’s nightmare, the dreaded ‘birds and bees’ chat. This loving father steps up to the plate to answer the questions from his inquisitive daughter. He is nervous as he awkwardly navigates his way through an explanation. But, humorously, the circumstance changes at the end.
Rebecca, 12 years old, learns that her Uncle Wallace, a cattle baron from Texas, is coming to visit. Rebecca doesn’t like her uncle and her only hope is that he will bring her a birthstone ring like the one he bought for her cousin the year before. After dinner, Uncle Wallace gives Rebecca her gift: a blue dress once owned by his wife Vera who has remained in Texas. When Rebecca’s mother asks her to try on the dress, Rebecca, bitterly disappointed, runs to her room in tears.
Rebecca soon suspects that her father and Uncle Wallace have reached an agreement that she won’t like. When her suspicions become true, Rebecca finds a way to exact a fitting revenge in return for the adults’ betrayal.
2. Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?
With the classic theme of a child against adults, this film can be enjoyed by preteens to eighty year olds. The central character of the child is not the usual heroine. The childish perspective of Rebecca contrasts with the reality facing the adults. The number of characters is limited to five; most of the action takes place in a house, its porch, and front yard. A street sidewalk is the only other location. The short story takes place just after WWII in Montreal, but this time frame can be pushed up 10-20 years, if necessary; the location can be moved to the US. A new car from the period is the main object that much reflect the period.
3. How would you describe this script in two words?
Outwitting adults.
4. What movie have you seen the most times in your life?
It’s hard to say. It’s a toss-up between Psycho, Citizen Kane, Wizard of Oz, and North by Northwest. All the while I’m watching, I’m telling myself, “You’ve seen this hundred times. You know every scene and most of the dialogue. Go do something else.” But I can’t tear myself away.
5. How long have you been working on this screenplay?
I’ve been working on this screenplay off and on for six months.
6. How many stories have you written?
I’ve written about 20 stories and a novel, published last year, called Echo from Mount Royal
7. What motivated you to write this screenplay?
I wanted to try my hand at writing a screenplay. My short story called The Blue Dress seemed to offer a good combination of dialogue and conflict. I was also intrigued by the young girl who struggles against the adults. Her perspective offered the opportunity to combine humor with sympathy. Her relationship with her mother vs her father undergoes a reversal that provides a satisfying conclusion.
8. What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?
Adapting a short story taught me how to externalize the interior thoughts of the characters. For example, the friend, Jackie, was created to help us understand, more clearly, the motivations of Rebecca. Several scenes of backstory in the prose work was dropped for time reasons and to make the plot line more streamlined. The criticism I received from the judge at the festival pertained to the length of time before the uncle arrives at Rebecca’s home. His arrival propels the plot into Act Two and must come sooner. Act One of the screenplay was shortened by 25% in the next revision.
9. Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?
My wife and I enjoy travelling throughout the world. I enjoy gardening and spending time with our grandchildren. Reading is the center of my life.
10. What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?
I joined FilmFreeway and began searching for festivals that accepted short screenplays. I chose this festival because I got a down-to-earth vibe from the website. I expect that hearing the screenplay will help me hear what dialogue works and what doesn’t. Also the judge’s criticism was exactly what had to be changed.
11. Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?
Join a critique group where you have the opportunity to workshop your script. Revise the script over and over to tighten the dialogue. Try to find place where a single word or sentence or action defines a character. Watch lots of films and study screenplays to see how professionals solve the problems we all face.
Watch the Winning 1pg. Short Story. Performed by Danielle Nicole
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Get to know writer Tegon Maus:
Matthew Toffolo: What is your 1pg Short Story about?
Tegon Maus: Perceptions…. People already have their minds made up about almost everything. You can give them 3 words and they will jump ahead because they think they know where the story is going… I like to make sure they don’t !!
MT: What genres would you say this short story is in?
TM: Humor
MT: How would you describe this story in two words?
TM: Pleasantly unexpected
MT: What movie have you seen the most in your life?
TM: It would be a toss-up between ID4 / Twister or 5th Element I have seen them all at least 9 times !
MT: How long have you been working on this story?
TM: A weekend
MT: Do you have an all-time favorite novel?
TM: Any of the Lensmen Series by E.E. Doc Smith
MT: What motivated you to write this story?
TM: It was a Vampire story contest
MT: What artist would you love to have dinner with?
TM: Jackson Pollock… I had read that in 1952 Jackson drank a six-pack of Coors beer and then filled the cans with different color paint… he then hung them with string over a blank canvas… poked a hole in the bottom of each with an ice pick and beat them wildly with a stick while listening to rock and roll ! The result is his now famous painting called Convergence that he sold to the Chicago Museum of Art for $68,000. Now that is a dinner conversation I would like to have !!
MT: Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?
TM: I write, paint, sculpt, garden, wood work, and love to take naps !
MT: What influenced you to enter the 1pg. Short Story contest?
Always looking for new readers.
MT: Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?
Only one ! Write whatever you want… not what’s popular. Just what YOU want to read… let everyone else follow you. Not the other way around.
Genres: Action, Adventure, Comedy, Family, Fantasy
To save her Henrietta’s life, she is left on an earthling’s doorstep by Geegle one of the most untrustworthy characters in the plot. It so happens she is left on the wrong doorstep. She falls into the hands of the greedy Fritzgrumpy’s and becomes their slave. After Henri discovers she is a foundling and her supposed parents were only interested in being paid for looking after her. Her life turns upside down. Eanie Meanie saves Henri aided by with Geegle. So she can to find her way back to her real place in time and space. However, the Black Cardinal who has taken her rights away wants her dead.